Comments : Long time outsider

  • 16 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    Now this poem is good! You did a really good job with meaning and imagery, and making me think, and just writing well. Very good! Again, you don't need commas after everything! It takes away sometimes. Other than that, overdue is one word, 'we believe is true' is a confusing line, so maybe spark that one up a bit. But otherwise, woo!

  • 16 years ago

    by neo

    Brilliant. where have u been my love