by Mister 47 Apr 30, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
Help me i bleed inside no breath i can take |
by Baby Rainbow
Did you ever see someone 's heart crying = thats such a sad line! |
by Mister 47
Thanx , very much , i am glade you liked it , i write it under pressure of my feelings , no mood or thinking to read it over at the time |
by kate
There was some parts that you could fix like just put a word in or take out. My advice i really don't give people them because i have mistakes to but just when you write a poem just reread it over before you submit it. but this was a good poem., just kinda hard to read the way it was put together but thats not always wrong either. :) |