by Goodbye Apr 30, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
Innocent dreaming |
by Salwa
Noor- |
THIS POEM IS AMAZING. You're meaning, imagery, forceful thoughts, everything, just very good. You forgot some words though, that will help the flow, my best idea is to go back through and see if anything sounds weird, it's good to say it outloud. If you can't find where I'm talking about, contact me, but otherwise, I think that you did an awesome job on this, I wish there was a 6 on the meter... |
No problem with the mess... Who wud not love dreams N after reading this sister Noorie... I too want to be in dreams n never wake... |