Broken.

Hmm i dont really agree the those thoughts but though u still express all the words u had too. and i think still good and everyone will relate. it short but there are some words was truly outstanding 4/8

Reading thing made me want to squeal out loud. That makes me sound totally weird, but your writing seems to make me want to do odd things. This piece, was another simple one. But it's so powerful. It holds a strong message -- one that anyone can easily relate to. It's just ... wow . The vocabulary was plain, easy, but the way you used to just added so much oomph. And the way you broke the lines down. At every break of line I'd take a deep breath and it's just so effective.

"Nothing matters."
Powerfully straightfoward words that everyone experiences more than just once in life -- and that's just the sad thing.

You portrayed the emotion here beautifully .
--..MiNDYY

Awww... i expected this to be really sad.. but it's so short.. it's not expressed very well and supported by the words u used.. =[ ur good.. all u need to do is let ur feelings mix with ur words to create a great poem.. like don't force to write if u don't hav enough emotions or inspiration... =]

Waw,its so sweet and sad but all of it is true,you write it perfectly and its great work ,nice flow and the less i can do is 5/5