Ooo nice job. So far it is the best I have read dealing with the poem of the week. I love the words you used and the description was just great. Five for sure.

First of all I must tell you that your word choice and the way you place your words in this poem is amazing. I also think that the descriptions are great and the poem as a whole is just beautiful. 5/5

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Again the imagery and all of the descriptive words
really hit this poem out of the ball park for me
it was phenomenal
I really enjoyed the second stanza
it just had a certain flare to it
nice work
5.5

First,
I believe you should fix your format.
It'd be easier to read.

Also I found no rhythm in this.
They're just... well, a bunch of words.

What I do admire about this poem,
Although it's quite chaotic,
I like the vocabulary use and the details.

I loved the metaphors, for example, poison through his vains.
I was thinking that it was alcohol.
But I'm pretty sure alcohol doesn't go through vains.

Ummm...... waw.
i liked it, it was confusing at times and i dont think i understood the whole thing but it was still good. i loved the beginning, up untill....."Visions of a velvet crimson swathed her....." after that you kinda lost me.
but the use of words paints a picture in your head of whats going on, you just have to explain a little bit more.
nice. keep it up. =]