Wolf-Girl

"ancient voices sung me a lullaby." That just sounds awesome, I enjoyed several phrases in this poem alot. The one above being my fav followed closely by "an entity
of dead freedom. "

I really liked the vocabulary you used i nthis poem. I am a sucker for werewolf poems.
When I first glanced over this poem, I thought the flow would be ridiculously scattered. However, I think the way you broke the poem up was brilliant.

A few suggestions:
"ancient voices sung me a lullaby"... I think you should change sung to sing, it would make much more of an impact.

"Therefore, I was,
a wolf girl,
an entity
of dead freedom."
I would put a period after girl, and a comma after entity. It's little stuff, but I think it would make a big difference. The last stanza is always the most important to me, and little changes can sculpt the poem.

Also, in the second stanza, I would try inserting a few more pronouns and punctuation.

Overall, I think you did a really great job in a short amount of space. Very nice write. =]

Another amazing piece. Wolf-girl added so much of a dark edge to it, and I enjoyed that.

"An amount of uncanny elusiveness,
just a particle that once contained nudity,
trapped within decaying heart
that sealed the door of our ardent kingdom."

^^I don't like the word "nudity" in here. I don't know why. Just thought I'd let you know. Also, I think it would be better if you began the second line with "is" just a suggestion.

"Therefore, I was,
a wolf girl,
an entity
of dead freedom."

^^Just as a suggesiton, maybe add a hyphen to wolf girl. so it would be wolf-girl. It matches how it was stated in the poem previously.

Overall, I have nothing bad to say about this. It was another amazing write by you. Good job!

5/5
~Lace

Good job.

keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nice work
it wasn't as strong as the others i read
but it was still good
and held a lot of charictaristics
that I saw in the other poems
nice job
5/5