Comments : Reverb

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I sat here a read this poem a couple of times and still I do not know what to say. Other then the fact that once again you have written another great poem. :) Another 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by xToBeWithYoux

    I really liked this poem overall, very chilling and a bit disturbing in places! I like the whole 'trick of the mind' theme in poems, I have a few like that...Well anyway back to your poem....:

    The re-occurring reverberations
    Echo in the silence of the night.
    Petty little screams, scratches
    Making hair stand tall and shiver.

    ^^ This stanza really stood out for me, either because it was the longest or the first or whatever, it just made an impact. Nice use of alliteration and imagery.

    Blackened souls arising,
    Blood flowing free.
    Hearts pounding harder,
    It's just you and me.

    ^^ Here's the death and destuction bits I like :D. This really works with the short but impacting stanza after the longer, beginning one. It was quite clever of you to link the black to blood - the dark, horrific part - the blood to the heart - humans, beasts etc - and then the hearts to the people - love, friendship. Either that's a very lucky fluke or that is a well crafted stanza :)

    Once again reverberations
    Getting closer than before.
    Whispers of death,
    Sounds of laughter,

    ^^ I really like the sense stimulation here. Most poems often focus on the sight too much, but this ties in some audio as well, at different levels and in varying tones. Mixing the death and laughter together in the sounds has quite an impact as well.

    Psychotic screams,
    Joy of happiness;
    Slaughtering humans
    This mans insane.

    ^^ Again, this is definately well written as we yet again see the theme running through the poem - joy and death together - in this stanza. Now, I don't mean to be picky but does the 'mans' need to be 'man's'? As in, 'This man is insane'? Sorry don't mean to be picky :)

    These screams for help,
    That echos in the night
    Is your true imagination.
    A reverb once again.

    ^^ I do love it when a poem ends with a twist, and what a great twist this is! And also how it links back to the start, how you have managed to remember the start of the poem without gettting caught up in the poem itself, like so many people do nowadays. Just a point though, is 'echos' meant to be 'echo', so it ties in with the first line of the stanza? The line makes sense on its own, but with the first line it doesn't make sense. But don't let me put a downer on the parade!

    So, yeah basicaly 5/5 for this one, and I think this is as 'in depth' as I meant on the forum!

    Keep writing, this is excellent stuff!

    Em :)