Oh this is for that contest! I've read a few of the poems for this contest, and I like yours the best.
Man, the way this flowed, how every word just rolled off my tongue *goes and reads again* *and again* IT'S AMAZING for the type of poem it is!
5/5
If it was my contest, you'd win!
~Lace [cheesy gangsta]

(Comment free-of-charge due to the shortness XD)

Your choice of words is truly powerful. The fact that you managed to say so much within such short piece impressed me. I like the title, it is eye-catching and it got me interested to read this piece. The rhythm that you created is effective and whole poem is original, different from anything I've read before.

I like this writing style and I think that it's quite difficult yet you pulled it off excellently.

Overall, fantastic dark poem, simple yet truly remarkable.

5/5

I love it. good work. excellent word usage, and i love the simplicity. it's really easy to understand. keep it up.

Chose good words, each was very emotional.
also i liked the name, it caught my eye.
the style was very unique
this deserves a 5/5
very good job