Eclipse

I loved it. Like other members have commented about the first line getting their attention, i can agree. It really drew me in and i became interested in reading the rest. Very well written..... so descriptive

First of all I really like the title, it is somehow powerful because of it's simplicity.

-Do not question my faith-

^This is truly intense line, it holds very strong message and you opened poem on interesting way.

-the one that embedded a detonator
into your silver, weeping moon,
remembers
all those nightmares
that were translated into pure madness.-

^I am honestly fascinated by these lines, I admire your creativity and message is very memorable. I don't think that my interpretation of the meaning of this stanza is correct though, but I love each word of it.

-Promises fade between bleeding stars,
the sky's burning, shiny scars
that testify about the times when we had gods.-

^This is interesting, I like the topic. Word -shiny- somehow doesn't feet in my mind, but my personal opinion, I think that you used that adjective because you have deep meaning because that are actually positive reminders but still I think that you could find better word.

-Some notes never played
haunt phlegmatic tendencies
turning the hourglasses,
ancient remains
within this digital mechanism.-

^amazing, truly amazing stanza. I like the way you said this, you expressed your message on truly effective way.

-Now, when the history merged
with the world's eclipse,
do not question my faith. -

^And this ending stanza is simply fantastic, truly impressionable. I like how you ended the poem and you made great connection between core of whole piece, start and the title. Truly clever and powerful write.

I admire your descriptions through the whole poem. Bravo, I really enjoyed in this piece.

Shine with power of amethyst dawns,
circling with fragrant delusions, embracing
tales weaved with moonlit needles.

Bestial thunderstorms shape
sacrilege- my addiction- of
inflamed claws which lacerate dreams;

Detuned communication
locked frail translations;
Lanterns burned down
our concrete clouds.

these lines struck me more than anything...........

amazing one!!!!!!!!!!

I really liked this poem
It was very jam packed with vocabulary
and it was an interesting choice for me
you did an absolute amazing job with this one
The descriptions for me really made this poem work
nice job
5/5

Excellent write... the imagery is wonderful... ok..i had to read it twice to grasp the meaning but some parts are still confusing...

the starting is brilliant..
"Do not question my Faith "...
I like it..

"Promises fade between bleeding stars,
the sky's burning, shiny scars
that testify about the times when we had gods."
^^ the imagery is perfect...

"Promises fade between bleeding stars"

^^ this line simple brilliant... I read it twice...it appealed to me so much..

"Some notes never played
haunt phlegmatic tendencies
turning the hourglasses,
ancient remains
within this digital mechanism."

^^ I really appreciate your word choice... great vocabulary...
but this part was a little confusing to me... I couldnot get the meaning...

overall it was an excellent read..

keep writing..