Beauty Unfolded

by Poet on the Piano   May 1, 2008


People might say the world is not great,
That it has flaws and many fates.
Some parts of the earth may not be the best,
But with nature it has gained respect.

Such as the glorious mountains that soar,
Their tips touching the cloud's perfect core.
The sun gleaming as if a sudden alert,
Making the clouds look like orange sherbert.

The lake acting as a reflecting mirror,
Showing the sky but ever so clearer.
The evergreens moving swiftly to each other,
As if telling secrets forbidden to another.

The sun is needed for warmth and pleasure,
Its brightness rises to an unknown measure.
The clouds are wanted for drops of wet rain,
Something that all nature can surely obtain.

The sun does not once hide within the clouds,
But instead stays out and looks very proud.
All together they make up a breathtaking place,
As the wind whispers words with wondrous grace.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    I'm not a fan of the opening, it made the reader feel as though they were only reading the poem, though had you such beautiful descriptions of nature, it felt as though being told about it rather than seeing it if you get what I mean.

    People might say is the phrase that shows that you are going to hear a poem and not take part in it, so is using the word that in the sentence after as though you need to explain the first line.

  • 16 years ago

    by expressivechild

    This is a beautiful one. I really like your use of language in this. Btw, thanks for correcting me on my spelling and grammatical errors. I wrote that poem a long time ago yet I didn't notice the mistake I made! Haha.. :p

  • 16 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    Another magnificent nature write from you! a brilliant rhyme and flow, once more. wonderfully written as well.
    i don't think the last two lines were really needed, but it was still very well penned.

    Together they make up a breathtaking place,
    As the wind whispers words with wondrous grace.
    ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
    truly breathtaking lines. my favourite part of the whole poem.

    5/5

    Keep Writing, hun
    As Always,
    ~NinjaGirl~

  • 16 years ago

    by Lisa

    That was absolutely inspired
    loved every sentence
    great work!
    God bless you
    Lisa

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    You have painted with words a heavenly picture of natural beautity that moves the spirit. You are a great poet

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