First of all baby, thank you for this poem, after last night, and that conversation, this means so much. I love you so much baby, and this really does mean more than you'll ever know. I love you gorgeous.

Anyway, to the poem;

"I wish I could do something,
To make it all go away,
But I can see it in your eyes,
Your wishing away every day."

==> I love this as a start, its an amazing beginning, it makes you, as the reader, want to know what you're talking about, and why this person is wishing away the days. Even in this stanza, you can already tell and feel the love in the poem.

"You pretend to be so tough,
When behind their backs, you cry,
Baby you don't need pretend,
When inside I know you want to die."

==> I love the line "When behind their backs, you cry". You portrayed the emotion greatly, and as its written about you, I can tell you that you've captured the thoughts and feelings amazingly baby, and so gently and sensitively.

"But baby let me tell you,
That I can see through that wall,
Baby you don't need to pretend,
Because I will always catch your fall."

==> I love that you said "I can see through that wall". It's so true, no matter how high, or wide I build it, you can always always see through it, past it, or over it. Again, this stanza showed how much you care babe, so thank you =]

"I know you feel so weak,
And the smiles you wear are fake,
Baby you don't need to pretend,
I know you've had all you can take.

And I know I cannot banish it,
But I swear I'll pull you through,
Baby you don't need to pretend,
Because I, babe, will be there for you.

I wish I could do something,
That would take your pain away,
But baby you don't need to pretend,
Just listen to what I have to say."

==> The emotions you expressed in these stanzas are great. I chose these 3 (4 including the one above) consecutive stanzas as I think that the repitition of "baby you don't need to pretend" really worked. It got into my head and the more you repeated it, the more I believed it, and that effect was awesome hun.

"Stop pretending to be okay,
When I can see through every lie,
Stop pretending to be tough,
And just cry the tears you need to cry."

==> This is my favourite stanza out of the whole poem. I love how you stated "Stop........" then said why, or what to do instead. I especially loved the last line "cry the tears you need to cry", as I actually think thats such an important thing to say to someone in this situation; that its okay, its okay to cry, and that those tears don't make them any less strong, but lets them express and release themselves. Definitely my favourite stanza :)

"I cannot promise to take it away,
But I can promise to hold you tight,
I cannot promise it wont be hard,
But I'll be there for every battle you fight."

==> Again, I love how you wrote "I cannot......" and then followed that with what you will/are going to do instead. And I know how important that is. To be able to say "look, I cant magic this better, and I can't take this away, or understand how you feel, but what I can do is be here for you, while you cry or scream". Being in that situation, I know its something that made me feel so much more comfortable around you, and being able to be myself :)

"One day you will be strong,
And I promise you will stand tall,
You will have the strength for anything,
And this babe, I believe most of all!"

==> As an ending stanza, I love this. It sums up the whole poem, and ties all your feelings and emotions to this person together. It really captures and portrays the faith you have in this person, the love you hold, and the amount you respect and believe in them. And seeing as i'm that person.... I'm truly touched baby.

Overall? I thought this poem was amazing. The flow was spot-on, and the feelings, and the raw emotion of the situation was clearly felt by every reader reading this. You managed to create empathy, not sympathy, for the person in question, and that's such a hard task to tackle.

Anyway, on a personal note. Thank you. You will never know how much you mean to me, and this poem is just a token of the bond we have. I'm gonna print it out and carry it with me everywhere so wherever I am, whoever i'm with, you will always be with me, to pick me up.

Babe, you'll never know how much you mean to you, and how amazing you are babe. Thank you for everything. For writing this, for being there, for putting up with me. I love you, with all of my heart, soul, body and mind. Truly.

I Love You So Much Xxxxx.

Hunni!!!!...this is so sweet like it has got me almost in tears!!!...shes a lucky girl...

its well structured and powerful, the emotion is so real and its really touching!!!!

well done hunni and keep it up!!!

xoxo

Wow this poem is extremely beautiful! I'll start off by saying that the flow is amazing and you tell a beautiful story! I love the whole topic you chose to write about. It is really comforting to read this and a lot of people can probably relate. It is a great thing when you can see past someone's fake smiles and realize when they are pretending because it shows you really care.. and you can help.

But baby let me tell you,
That I can see through that wall,
Baby you don't need to pretend,
Because I will always catch your fall.
^^ Beautiful stanza.. it is nice to know that you have someone that you can be yourself around because they will love you no matter what - and in this poem you are that person that will be there no matter what.

I know you feel so weak,
And the smiles you wear are fake,
Baby you don't need to pretend,
I know you've had all you can take.

^^^ I love this stanza because you are saying that it is ok to be sad... it is ok to be weak.. we don't need to pretend because sometimes life can be so rough on us that we NEED to be sad and cry just so we can move on. You do a great job of showing that feeling this way is OKAY.

And I know I cannot banish it,
But I swear I'll pull you through,
Baby you don't need to pretend,
Because I, babe, will be there for you.

^^ Again - another reassuring stanza - letting them know that you will help and you will be there.

Stop pretending to be okay,
When I can see through every lie,
Stop pretending to be tough,
And just cry the tears you need to cry.

^^ This stanza is my favorite because it pretty much sums up the entire poem. Stop pretending and just be yourself because it is OKAY! I love this stanza. Amazingly written.

Baby just stop pretending,
Be the person that you are,
If you need a listening ear,
Then I babe will never be too far.

^^ Another beautiful stanza. You say it all and you say it perfectly. "Be the person that you are" .. I couldnt agree with that statement anymore.

Hun beautiful job! I loveeee this poem .. it is a beautiful poem and very reassuring.. You seem like such a genuine and sweet person just by reading this poem. Everyone needs a friend like this to just let them know they it is ok to feel the way they are feeling and it is ok to be yourself.

Beautiful poem. More people need to read this poem! 5/5 from me.. it deserves more. and thank you soooo much for the comments you left me. I really appreciate them =)

Wow a inspiring piece of poem... marvellously penned..

Keep it up..

Best wishes....007

This was a truely amazing poem. I can relate so much to what you were saying. This was very inspiring and reminded me of my g/f. It's obvious how much you love her. She's lucky to have you. But like I was saying this piece was beautiful. Plz check out my work. 5/5
~Forever Broken~

Ur poem is beautifully written and expresses how much u r so close to ur friend and how much U care.I liked the poem and enjoyed reading it...
Good job,keep it up:)5/5...

Awh this was a very sweet piece. quite heartfelt. my favorite kinds of poems. and i could really relate to this. i love poems i can relate to, makes me feel better to kno im not the only one going through the same struggle or what not. job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.