Awww thats so sad, very emotional poem. well done for sharing this xxx

I feel slow because it took me a second to realize what the poem was about, as I thought of the wrong type of viewing.

I like your style, and I love how you tied the beginning and end. It was a smooth and meaningful read, full of memory and emotion.

Great job, I give you a 5/5. I really liked your poem.

And thank you for commenting mine.

Very well written. The rhyme scheme was at times a little rough but honestly this is one of the best I have ever read on the subject of loss. This is the first piece I have read by you and I am deeply impressed.

This is just so sad..I could feel your pain in every word...I think it was well written and the repeating of the opening stanza really added to the quality of the poem!

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

This is a great write.
the emotion in this poem was extremely intense. great work.
very sad, left me a little speechless.
magnificent.
5/5

Im speechless! amazing work! 5/5

4th line
"And I realized that you were gone away"
"you were gone away" doesn't sound right.
Maybe change it to
"And I realized that you have gone away"
or something like that.

5th stanza
"But your gone and I'm not fully complete"
the word "fully" doesn't seem to belong there.

last stanza
"And I realized that you were gone away... "
put "had" in place of "were".

This was a very sad poem of lose. I really liked it though. Form the most part the wording and flow were good. I gave it a 5/5. There are only a few things that you might fix. Keep up the great work.

Sad indeed, yet well written and touching. This is the first time i've red your poem and i like your writing styles. Keep it up, kel.

Now that is such a sad poem. It moved me deeply. I loved the fact that you repeated the first stanza into the last stanza it really made the poem feel complete and made a great impact on me. It's a really moving poem and if this happens to be true...I'm sorry for your loss. I give this poem 5/5
Keep this up. mwah xxxx

This is such a powerful poem. truly great. i love how the last verse repeats the first... it adds emphasis.

all in all great job on this piece 5/5

Im sure this comment is late but sorry for your lose,loseing someone is never ez....good writing!!