A man

by iloveyouandrew   May 2, 2008


Fly to the sky
Its time to say goodbye
Your gonna be high

Leave this world
with no remorce
You were a man
with alot of pain

When you left
I couldn't stop crying
I felt a flow of pain
But also a flow of anger
For god taking you

People loved you
People still do
I know I do,
You were a great man

You were my hero
but you dropped to zero
I couldn't do anything about it
You just got hit by a terrible diesease

But from your heart
grew a red, red rose
It flows like a beautiful waterfall

I miss you
I can't deny it
You will always be a part of my soul
Even when I fall in this deep, deep hole

For you were a man
A very great man
You had alot of love
And now your one of gods doves

[[REST IN PIECE UNCLE DAVE 2-8-08]] :[[

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  • 16 years ago

    by she

    I'm deeply sorry for your loss
    but you wrote a great poem
    a lot of feeling in it,
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    No offence or anything but this poem didn't really contain any emotion. Since this poem was about someone passing away I thought it would have been filled with sadness and possibly anger.. but I didn't feel that. Towards the end there is a little but I feel that there could be so much more.

    Personally I think the poem lacks color.. if you know what I mean. So maybe you could use more descriptive words, maybe some more adjectives..

    Don't get me wrong, this poem isn't bad, it just needs a little fixing up. And I'm not trying to be some shallow bitc*h I'm just telling you what I think... Anyway.. 4/5 from me.

  • 16 years ago

    by KJ

    Another great write
    Wonderful emotion
    Beautifully written
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Awww thats so loving. so emotionally written but its good. well done for sharing it xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Heba

    Wow. it is a wonderful one

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