Comments : I Dare You

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Great work xxxx

  • 16 years ago

    by noha

    Waw,its strong personality you have,whatever happend never let any one change you,and be who you are,i realy love it and i enjoy alot,i even feel stron when i read it again 5/5 well done

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Very good work! I enjoyed the message and the structure you used to deliver it. I thought your flow is fine as it stands

  • 16 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Very well written...
    The repetition of 'I dare you' really leaves an impact on the reader....i like the message behind the poem... no matter what you wont change...you will still be who you are...

    Hit me.
    Whip me.
    Throw me.
    Lie to me.
    Burn me.
    Drown me.
    I Dare You!

    No Matter What.
    I Will Still Be Who I Am.

    ^^ the last lines are so powerful..
    beautiful write..

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Really enjoyed this read, good message, well versed. Thought, I would enjoy reading this with the last line of the first stanza replacing all the last lines(repetitive).

  • 16 years ago

    by eehcuhhhz

    Bad and good.

    Bad first?
    Alright.

    It could be that throw

    It sounds wrong.
    Try... "It could be that THAT throw"

    Honestly?
    I think at some points you took things too far.
    Like, burning and drowning you?

    It doesn't fit in with the poem.

    At least that's what I think.

    But other than that...

    I didn't like this poem as much as the other.

    Probably because I disagree with it.

    Quote: "No Matter What.
    I Will Still Be Who I Am."

    In my belief,
    Experience molds and changes a person.
    We don't know who we are yet.

  • 16 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    Wow, very strong poem. I like this. I like the repetativness of "I dare you" After every action.