This was amazing. the rhymes were good, and the rhythmn held throughout the poem. i thouroughly enjoyed this.

"I shall not float to heaven,
Graceful as a swan,
On wings of fire, I'll find my way,
Lit up like the dawn."

this was a good start to the poem. it intrigued me, and made me want to continue reading. excellent job.

Wow really good its amazing i love the rhyming and i love the first and last stanzas

5/5
shattered pieces of a broken heart