Wow..this was really good. it had a really strong power to it.
i could feel your grief and pain.
i really hope you dont really feel that lonely.
...
anyways good Job!
Aly

Very poewrful work here, the words flowed very well and made the poem enjoyable to read.

excellent xx

I try but the waves i swim are growing stronger-should be"swim THROUGH"
that guides me though- should be GUIDE
please by the hand to lead me- Should be BE
please by my courage- Should be BE

That's a great poem you have there. Puts mine to misery.