Like I mentioned before, your writing style is very unique, but it works. Like you said, the ending is a bit weak and you should try to polish that up, and as Mesroth said it was also premature. This poem could be so much better if you would add a few more stanzas to it. But I must admit that I love your word choice and how you piece this poem together. Nice work. 5/5

I actually enjoyed this poem
yeah the ending was a little weak
but nothing really bad
I loved how it started off
it was erie and it was filled with imagery
imagery to me is key with writing
and you always seem to pull it off
5/5