No Time for Me

This piece I didn't think flowed as well as your others, and for this reason, I didn't like it as much. Also, I couldn't feel any passion nor power behind the words. Sorry. The rhymes too, were a bit stiff, though I will say, that the best stanza, for me, was the last one, and that's the most important.

Brad

Nice write, I liked the rhyme scheme. The flow was good as well as the structure, however; I felt it could of been better with puncuation through out.

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I would have loved to help you
But you never had the time
You were usually in prison
It seems to me an awful crime

^^This stanza was very well written, however; I felt it wasn't wise to start with it, perhaps go into a little depth before coming to this stanza about why the person was in prison?

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If you were not with another
You would go home to your mother
Or you would stay with a friend
That had a helping hand to lend

^^Again a Nice write with such easy flow. Like I mentioned above, puncuation is important, for example:

If you were not with another,
You would go home to your mother;
Or you would stay with a friend
That had a helping hand to lend.

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I wonder if you could have missed me
When like Judas Iscariot you kissed me
If I were you I would not run from Him
The One that could fill your cup to the brim

^^This in my opinion was a nice filler that made the flow from one stanza to the next nicely. All your stanzas are greatly constructed and with some help from puncuation they'd be great.

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Will He know you, or will He say depart?
I have no need for another broken heart
Or will he say welcome with loving open arms?
Spending eternity saving you from all harms?

^^I felt this was a nice way to wrap the poem up. Overall a great job.

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Wonderful write, keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe