Like Good Brothers Should

Sad that he would end his own life for his sister. and it is sad that there are people that do that. 5/5
Aaron

Oh wow.
u have talent girl.
5\5
xox
katrina

I LIKE THIS POEM.

Fantastic. Loved it.
Just exceptional.
5/5 easy from me.
xxxx

"A faint glint of hope, resting in his eye
Maybe his sister didn't mean to die"
&
"Maybe just maybe, she wanted to live
Just for her life back, anything he'd give"

^^ You used the world "Maybe" too often here, so it became a little bit annoying. Instead of using the line 'Maybe his sister didn't mean to die', you could use a question: "Did his sister really mean to die?"

"To see her alive, not dead in her blood
He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should"

^^ That second line, "He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should" was truly beautiful.

"He couldn't cope, without her by his side
So just to see her, a hero he died"

^^ I wasn't sure whether to call the ending beautiful or extremely heartbreaking. It's certainly a beautiful *and* extremely heartbreaking poem though.

Very well done.