My Wish

by Justin   May 5, 2008


So many times i should have pled
So many words i wish id said
So many things that I did wrong
But here i am standing strong

I have to think about my life
Cant let your love cause me strife
You chose your path, now i chose mine
Its just something i cant define

I have to move on with my dreams
Ive used up all of my old schemes
I tried so long for your love
Now I give my heart to the one above

I wish all this could just change
I wish you'd come and rearrange
I wish this wasn't how it had to be
Without you in my life i don't feel complete

I hope you find the right guy
Someone who treats you right and wont lie
That special one who makes you free
Gives you love and makes you happy

So many things i didn't do
So many lies i didn't make true
So many attempts to try and hold her
so many things and now its over

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  • 12 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Wow it ain't easy losing someone you love so deeply..

    I wish all this could just change
    I wish you'd come and rearrange
    I wish this wasn't how it had to be
    Without you in my life i don't feel complete

    ^^
    That stanza left me speechless!
    Wishing it wasn't like this wishing she was by your side cos she completes you..

    I loved it
    5/5

    X

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    One thing ive notice..i think the word complete dint go with the rhyme but honestly i dint affect the intensity of the poem..Vividly written..Very powerful and comes from the heart..It touched me deeply especially when you wished here good things and regreted things you dint do and say...Vert well written but as again filled with extreme sadness...

  • 16 years ago

    by Sora

    This was a beautiful write. the first stanza was a wonderful start for a poem such as this one. the words you wrote for this poem came straight from your heart, i could tell. the flow was terrific. and you expressed yourself very well. job well done 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    This is a good poem. I think you should capitalize your I's and use the apostrophes ('). You surely had decent flow and great word choice. You did go from "you" to "her" while meaning the same person. But, it wasn't to bad - I just suggest making it all go together.

  • 16 years ago

    by Liz

    That is really good i really liked it :)

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