Hmm.. well right now, it seems more like a paragraph than a poem. I think you need to add some better descriptive words. The flow is a bit off.. I think you should make the rest of the poem flow like the first line.

for they now know that I have been bad.
^^I don't like the word bad here. I think you could chang it... "Each dark spot, represents something wrong that I've done" <--- that's just an example of what it could be. Just a suggestion though.

When the neighbors hear my screams,
I feel so pathetic and stupid,
^^Hmm.. "When the neighbors hear my screams, I know I've let someone down". I don't know if that's what you were going for.. haha. I, myself, am suffering from writer's block.

for they now know, I have been put face down, I have been beaten, I am weak.
^^"I will walk with my head down, my spirit and body beaten. I am weak.". Wow.. okay.. I seriously have writer's block and that probably doesn't help very much. I'm sorry. >< I tried.

What I do think you need to do is make this longer.. maybe go into detail with the beatings.

Keep writing!
Cayce

I WOULD LOVE to print this out, and create a colab MAY I??

Your work is always so sad hunny. one day you will be changing all these poems into feelings of being free and happy i know you wil xxxx