Frenzied

by eehcuhhhz   May 5, 2008


The stars, the moon, the sky,
They will bow down, you will see.
That I am yours and only yours,
And forever we will be.

Yet the stars refuse to shine,
With you and I under its glow.
The Gods refuse us to be together
For a reason I don't want to know.

Painful hints have been dropped
Bombing the sky of my existence.
As you move farther and farther away,
I try to close out the distance.

A battle between us against nature
Yet you are not there for the brawl.
I will stand alone against an army
With no one to catch me as I fall.

These hints of yours, they tear me,
For I know that all will end soon.
Once again, I will ignore and smile,
And these feelings I will consume.

Although, I will stand to protect,
What I believe is rightfully mine.
The day will come when all would fall
To form Gods frenzied design.

**Is the title okay?**

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  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    The first stanza was great for the opening. And I really thought this was well written:

    "Yet the stars refuse to shine,
    With you and I under its glow.
    The Gods refuse us to be together
    For a reason I don't want to know."

    That's pretty sad, ya know, that the Gods refuse you to be together. But I could feel the emotion and the sadness as I read these words. Overall, a truly wonderful poem that really proved you can write beautifully! Nice work and keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I loved your beginning stanza because it quickly captured my attention and had me wanting to read more. The imagery was flawless and the it all just flowed naturally. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Unamed

    Yeah the title is fine

    u r a great poet!!!

    i loved it!..specially the 1st stanza!!!!!!!

    Aly

  • 16 years ago

    by michael

    Powerfull foem and great flow 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lovely

    Great poem, the title really got my attention. Its unique

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