Woowoohhhoooo what a start...LOVED it..yahh.

Over and over you told me that
Nothing could change the way
Over and over you told me there
Was nothing I could say
>>was nothing for me to say (better)

But I am here
>>>all on my own; rather than (alone) since u used it in the following lines..right?
Tell me, where are you?
And I am here
Alone
Tell me, where have you gone?
I need to know
I need to know

Over and over you told me that
Nothing could change the way
Over and over you told me there
>>Was nothing for me to say (changed)
But I am here
all on my own (changed from alone)
Tell me, where are you?
And I am here
Alone
Where is it you've gone?
I need to know
Where have you gone?
I need to know

>>> im sorry for my suggestions..its ur poem u can just ignore..and ur poem..mygod let me talk about ur opening lines...flowed SO well..and rhymed !!tho a free verse
how amazing

and the poem it self..REally REally sad..the repetition just shows a burn in the heart

I loved it
5/5