Cut my skin and make me cry
I hate the world I wish I would die"
I love the start of this, I first read it and was drawn into reading the rest of the poem. Very good start to it.
"I want more blood, more blood to shed.
Don't hesitate please go right ahead."
I know exactly how you feel when you write this with cutting ones self. You need to see more blood and you put it together in very good words.
"I hate the people no good friends.
I never had one never will to the end."
I feel this way exactly, very emotional.
"I need more pain, More pain Please.
I need to be calm put to my ease.
Please help me help me one more day.
I swear it's my last and than you can play."
Pain can be an addiction and I love how you put it together in such an innocent matter. Made this poem very elegant and morbid but in an innocent yet sweet matter.
"Moment's latter She committed suicide.
She was tired to be one who cried
Please calm your emotions and don't do this.
I am pretty sure All who did are really missed. "
I love how you added a second person's point of view in this poem. Not many people do this and it made the poem very original. Good work keep it up.