Comments : Sweet Decision (Made in Forest)

  • 16 years ago

    by eehcuhhhz

    This poem seems simple.
    I don't know if it's good/bad simple.
    But that was the first thing that came up in my mind.

    Birds are singing pretty songs?

    You could change that.
    Maybe to even:
    While the birds sing their pretty songs

    It seems as though a fairy tale.

    I don't know.
    Lol.

    It's okay.
    But I bet it can be you can make it better.

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    Loved the last stanza more and although i haven't been in this expreince but i guess i know how you feel of being protective and don't want to be hurt again

  • 16 years ago

    by x Mo x

    That was a good poem!

    I like the imagery in the first part. I also like how it flowed so well and stayed together.

    Great write!