Comments : Beside broken glass and a blood-filled cup, theres a note

  • 16 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    A brilliant but sad piece 5/5 the flow was marvelous as was the rhyme!!!

    Keep Writing, lovely
    As Always,
    ~NinjaGirl~

  • 16 years ago

    by Ian Robert

    I liked this one, but I don't know, rhyming is okay but it just doesnt seem to flow perfect... try humming it when you write i know it brings allot more flow into my work.. check some out see if it helps