Comments : Can you hear me?

  • 16 years ago

    by withlove

    This is not what I want
    This is not who I am
    I tried hard and hard
    but no one gave a dam
    i really like these lines
    but maybe change it to harder and harder or really hard or something like that. i think it would sound better
    great job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Thats really good, powerfully written, keep it up xx