Nice ending of the poem.

I'm right here I'm confused
= I'm right here and I'm confused
^ I think that would be better with the (and)

Keep writing!
Thanks for the comment.

LOVE IT
It ROcks
wish you all the best of love and success
sunnah
from egypt

This is a good poem.

I'm right here, I'm confused
I'm right here, why can you see right through?

Favorite line. each of your beginning lines are very well done. They are the starting. The first two lines are the best out of each sentence.

5/5