Darien!

What a sad story you wrote...
Very beautiful though. I love stories about princesses:) You have chosen your words well!

Hugs,

Ingrid

I can take this poem in so many ways. It's hursh and quik. gr8 job:)

Some lines are very interesting. It's a very interesting poem as well. Last stanza is very good.

Very interesting poem.

"Eros you betrayed me, with your selfish act,
Brought agony to my princess and our love.
Jealousy made you weak and your eyes green.
The Gods cherish you for you are one of them."

I could sense the despair and sadness you are feeling. Also throughout the whole poem there is a sense of love and longing. As I said before this poem was really interesting. The whole way it was written was very different. Very nice work. 5/5

Lovely vocabulary
it really drew me into the poem itself
I really liked the imagery you chose to put into this poem
the structure was good
I might change the first line to be longer though
otherwise nice job
5/5

Awww very nice language use, this is very good. ver different i think, well done for wrting this you used good skills to create a good peice

xxx

Aching of the heart echos throughout this piece in such a steady flow, so powerfully written of a reality that so deeply touches upon most of us once in our lifetime, so relatable and written with your gentle hands of your poetic beauty. Well done on this piece, 5/5

This piece is so refreshing, it's different from anything I've read before. Very profound poem, vivid and creative. I think that you managed to express your emotions excellently from the beginning to the end, and what it the most important, on such original way.

The way you started the poem with "My lonely princess" is very effective. Also, I like the title, it's unique and eye-catching. The flow of the piece is also flawless through every stanza, except here: "Eros you betrayed me, with your selfish act,". I think that you should put comma after "Eros" because you address to it in the rest of the line so it sounds better with the pause there.

I like your choice of words a lot, along with the atmosphere that you created. This poem holds many emotions and really good metaphors which is excellent combination.

My favorite stanza is:

- My lonely princess,
Come lie within the ruins that is my heart,
Viciously torn to shreds by his daunting voice.
These pillars of Chaos hold bitter vengeance,
Deep within hollow walls of crimson blood.-
^^^
Brilliant introduction to the poem, truly powerful and captivating. It pulled me deeply into the piece and made me want to read more. Also, you portrayed so vivid and intense imagery in every line.

All in all, greatly done.

Ohmigod that was amazing! The way you start the poem "My lonley princess.." was such a great hook and you reeled me in.

Come lie within the ruins that is my heart,
Viciously torn to shreds by his daunting voice.
These pillars of Chaos hold bitter vengeance,
Deep within hollow walls of crimson blood.
^^^ That is personally my favorite stanza.

Your choice of vocabulary really added to the atmosphere of this poem. It is incredible how so few words can grab my mind and pull me deep, feeling the emotions you displayed.

Brilliant job!! I love it! *clicks to add to favorites*
~Stefanie

Eros you betrayed me, with your selfish act,

There's no need for a comma there.

Oh wow.

This actually makes me want to read
The book of the gods.

I have a fascination with it. But I could never keep awake.

Otherwise.
Really good writing.
5/5

A beautifully scripted poem... Sounds to me as if I am watching some kind of a ballad. Mind blowing is not the exact word which can be used to describe this poem... Coz this poem should be rated high above mindblowing. What made me mesmerise the most was one particular stanza and that is the starting itself. Wow! What a way to start the poem. Keep writing this way... Rock On!

Regards,
Bhavin

Wow...that poem was deep and intelligent...and sad...very well written..i loved it.

Woooow! This was an exceptional poem! The flow was awsome, on point and constant in every stanza. I'm not into gloomy poems anymore, but this one rocked my socks off! One word, beautiful!