Okay, so on the technical stuff that people normally comment on -- overall, it was very striking. Definitely dark (Well, duh, considering it's in the dark category, but I'm just saying). Your choice of haunting questions is clever. But I'll get to that as this comment progresses.

Look back at all of the evil deeds you have done
What kind of victory do you think you have won?
`This made my heart pound. It slapped me across the face extremely hard on a personal level, which is probably why this piece affects me more than others that I've read. The tone I get from these opening lines are twisted -- vicious, even. They're powerful, and just made me think back to a huge error that I made the previous year.

Do you think you can make the darkness sublimely dark?
Is that how you think you would like to leave your mark?
`What a mouthful, but the diction is beautiful. "darkness sublimely dark" Repeat of dark made me stare a bit in silence, but it works to me.

Are you really happy with your self, or your disguise?
Do you like the truth, or are you satisfied with your lies
`Engaging expressions, by far. Again, lines that shoved me up against the wall with old injuries that I never got to fix.

Can you count on other losers to fill in the gap,
Or do they want to pile their troubles in your lap?
`This made me laugh -- the image it brought, literally just a ton of disfigured creatures being dumped upon a random lap. It was sickeningly well portrayed and really sends a message to the reader. Or to me, anyhow.

Have you lost your mind, has your heart grown cold?
Who do you trust the most, has your soul been sold?
If you could gain the world what do you think its worth?
When you know that your body must return to the earth
`Powerful stanza. So many questions -- it allows thoughts to linger and the brain to really think -- to ponder the answers to these questions.

The winners are not the sinners that you have accused
Of being the losers that you have justifiably abused
What more can be done, what more can be honestly said
About those whom have lost their souls when they are dead
`A powerful ending. I don't fully comprehend what the meaning behind this piece is -- but all I know is that I'm going to keep wondering about these questions brought up ... along the ghosts of my pasts that your piece just brought out that I feel I must contemplate and get rid of after so long.

So I actually want to thank you, both for a powerful piece -- and for writing something that actually made my pulse thunder.

Well done.
--..MiNDYY

I think the word dead was a bit too much..
I'd suggest something not so dramatic.

Instead of critiquing.
I believe I'll just say how this poem means to me, how I see it, or maybe even feel about it.

I saw an angry person pointing a finger at me. [Me, the bully]

Something tragic happened to someone close.
And this person just lost it, lost control.

In the end, I see him crying.
Because underneath that anger,
There's a person tearing for the someone he/she lost.

Another good, strong piece. I liked it a lot. The best quality this piece had, was it's power, which came from the great use of words, and the brilliantly structured lines.

Brad

Well this was different from you and I truly enjoyed it. It was packed with suspense and power making me wanting to continue reading from beginning to end. Nice choice of words and overall message. Well done *5/5*

This is a deep, but yet truthful poem

I chose this poem because of the title which is simple yet interesting.. actually i enjoy reading this poem for i can relate myself on this one.. the flow is flowing gracefully and emotion shown is vivid.