Losing Self Respect

by eehcuhhhz   May 9, 2008


A sensual kiss from the lips,
Slowly molding into one.
There is nothing left to offer;
But the deed has just begun.

Knowing her body must be given,
For her requires to be obtained.
The jester feigns a demonstration
Of how the man will be entertained.

The lady knows that it's a mistake;
For she is not yet ready for the trip.
However another part of her is curious
Of what he had to offer and equip.

Knowing if no was her answer
That he would quickly depart.
Without ever have knowing
That he'd taken her heart.

He would love her like no other,
For they will never be apart.
They will grow older together,
As he takes her to his heart.

For now she entertains him,
Doing only what has been told.
A lifeless doll she will be tonight,
Trusting what the future has to hold.

**Blah, the title sucks. It's for a contest. I tried to revolve the whole thing around the title. And yet, this formed on it's own. BLAH! Now I don't have a title :/

I had something about virginity in there. But I realized that I guess I was goin' overboard. Lol.

    report violation
0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    I think you used to ambient theme in this to create some kind of openess to interpretation which I feel is a hard thing to do. Although the language you put in was fairly 'simple', it worked and you pulled this poem off with the actual pragmatic meaning rather than literal. Exellent write

    Alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    ^For her requires to be obtained^

    That just doesn't make sense.......

    The poem had forced rhyming and many filler words. I see where you were trying to go with it, but it just didn't work. Not deserving of the front page, but with time and effort, you will get better.

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Nice poem, I thougth the ending was especially strong. You were descriptive and all that good stuff! Very cute!

  • 16 years ago

    by Unamed

    I liked it it was really sweet. i dont think it was sucky at all.....

    "He would love her like no other,
    For they will never be apart.
    They will grow older together,
    As he takes her to his heart."

    ^^that was beautifur!
    good job!
    Aly

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    I actually like the title
    but if you want suggestions
    rag doll or something to a doll effect
    nice write by the way
    I enjoyed it
    I really feel this way though I have never gave in
    personally
    but i know what this is about
    from experience
    5/5

Read All Comments (6)

More Poems By eehcuhhhz