I liked it, truly i did. Its just that i couldn't connect with either of the characters. All i got out of the poem was the fact that the guy used to sleep with alot of other girls, which really isn't a good fact.

Possibly adding a bit more detalil about the women would help the connection slighty. I'm not really sure at the moment.

Your flow however was great, but the diction in this one was slightly less detailed than in your other poems. But even with the slight things i disliked all together i think this poem is wonderful. 4/5

Like the others i cant really think of a good title at the moment...'Forgiving the Accepting' comes to mind but that really isn't such a great title. My brain is fried at the moment, sorry.

--Alexander--

I actually like the title
but if you want suggestions
rag doll or something to a doll effect
nice write by the way
I enjoyed it
I really feel this way though I have never gave in
personally
but i know what this is about
from experience
5/5

I liked it it was really sweet. i dont think it was sucky at all.....

"He would love her like no other,
For they will never be apart.
They will grow older together,
As he takes her to his heart."

^^that was beautifur!
good job!
Aly

Nice poem, I thougth the ending was especially strong. You were descriptive and all that good stuff! Very cute!

^For her requires to be obtained^

That just doesn't make sense.......

The poem had forced rhyming and many filler words. I see where you were trying to go with it, but it just didn't work. Not deserving of the front page, but with time and effort, you will get better.

I think you used to ambient theme in this to create some kind of openess to interpretation which I feel is a hard thing to do. Although the language you put in was fairly 'simple', it worked and you pulled this poem off with the actual pragmatic meaning rather than literal. Exellent write

Alex xxx