A teardrops nd hits the floor
many follow after
she only cries when shes alone
nobody truly knows how hurt she is
she walks around with that fake smile
on her face..
do her friends care...???
do they care how hurt she is...??

'A tear drops and hits the floor
...many follow after.
She only cris when she's alone;
nobody truely know how hurt she is.
She walks around with a fake smile.
Do her friends care?
Do they see how hurt she is?'

This is a very good write. You did a great job with the emotion. I think that this could use a few grammar/spelling corrections. I hope you dont mind; I was just making a suggestion. But you did a wonderful job with the emotion and question.

*cris = cries
:)

The emotion flows thru so well here. Don't stop writing.

"A teardrops nd hits the floor"
"And has been mispelled to "nd"

another one of your great works.

This piece is amazing, the emotion is so clear and simple. Its simple and short, however it is stunning.