And with every word you speak you make me smile,
I just wish I could be with you,
Even if just for a while,

For however long fate keeps us apart,
I shall always have a hole the size of you in my heart.
i really liked those two stanzas
so much feeling and emotion
good job 4.5/5 =D

Well, this poem is definitely beautiful..but you sporadically changed from not rhyming to rhyming...it's good and bad. It kind of shows us where the two different writers were. Careful with having to rearrange sentence structure, sometimes it takes away from it. This poem is definitely filled with love though, and try not to be cheesy! It's more romantic to /not/ have to say 'I'm being truthful' they should feel it, you know? Great job though!