Oooh, like it, the ending was great
short but strong
i give a 5/5

Too cliche'd. It's... just a few words jumbled together. There ought to be more to it than just words. Try describing your feelings, make us see what you see.

"I had a crush
broke my heart
What did i do
I fell apart
thinking of you
Breaks my heart"
Surprise, surprise. Everyone goes through that. Say something that makes you different from everyone else. Describe the way you see 'you' when you close your eyes, or the way 'you'r perfume still haunts the bathroom... Stuff like that, y'know?

It was common but i like it it was short and to the point but theres just something about it that i like, im not really sure what it is though but i like it