Very interesting write, I enjoyed the refrain up to the fourth and fifth stanzas. The fourth confused me while the fifth's last line broke my rythm. After that it took of again. If I could relate to that 4th stanza my good would rise to a 5. As always just an opinion.
Did enjoy it though.

Thanks for your comment, the 4th stanza probably makes no sense to you as its in reference to a British vehicle road worthy test - the M.O.T. which is a statutory requirement for all road going vehicles here in the UK. The vehicle in question failed as he had an airfreshener dangling from the rear view mirror!

I wasn't overly keen on the 5th stanza either. It was my first ever attempt though so I'm quite pleased overall.

Many thanks for taking the time to read and comment :-)