by XxxBeenThereRockedThatxxX May 9, 2008
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Funny how you try to write something |
I can relate to this poem so well |
Nothing struck me as absolutely amazing about this when I read it. It just seems like the average poem about a crush or love/lust. I think you could also work on the structure of this poem, make it interesting. Maybe you could format it so that it's in a cool shape or just even standard stanzas. Also add some emotion. This poem was just all questions that lead the reader nowhere. They seem jumbled and irratic. I think this poem would be much better if it were not all questions, even though that may have been the point. I just think that this poem could be so much more if you just put a little more effort into it. |
by mandy
That was very interesting, |