On Wings of Fire (552) [[CONTEST]]

I'm wishing, wanting, begging for more
Kiss me, hold me, push me to the floor.

^^ I think these two lines are what attracted me to this poem. I don't know why, they just flowed perfectly. =]

Do whatever you want to me
Because I need you right now
I just can't get you out of my mind,
But I've thrown in the towel.

^^ I think, what would make the flow better in this one, in the second line, I'd take out 'just' and in the last like I'd make 'Ive' into I have. If you do that you will have the syllables going 8, 7, 8, and 7 again. I think it may flow a little better.

I've given up for you
Got down on my knees
Because being on wings of fire
Has caused me to see.

^^ Putting 'because' in the 3rd line i think breaks the flow again in this one. If you take it out, it still has the same meaning as well.

Overall, it's a very good poem my dear. =] I think I'd give it a 4/5 =] Good luck in the contest.

XoOrdinaryGirloX

Mmmmmmm, yummy! Love it... absolutely love it... I know it sounds so brief but I don't know what else to say... it got me hot just reading it..