THIS IS THE.........................BEST
WOW
Natalie, you are on my favorite and this poem as well
How many people do you find who write such a gr8 poem on such unconventional subject
Totally brilliant and you rock
5/5
Every line is so well crafted and true with all the poetic sense

thanks for sharing this with me....

tc,
Rohan

Loved it. Although the rhyming scheme is off and most rhymes are not perfect rhymes I don't give a damn. It was kick ass. I agree with you wholeheartedly. I really loved that you used proper grammar, punctuation, spelling, blah blah blahs. I HATE when people don't do that. It not only makes them look uneducated but it detracts from the true artwork and makes it look trashy. It's like giving the wrong picture frame to the perfect picture. It's just bad! Anyways. I truly enjoyed this poem and I have earned myself the title of being a poetry Hitler so it should mean a lot for me to give you a five.

I live in America, and I agree with every word of this.
It was a fantastic write, a great subject. If only people would view America like this, then maybe there could be change.
Your ending was AMAZING. It totally went out with a BANG!
Fantastic!
5/5
~Lace

All I can say this is brilliant. Just Brilliant. That's the way it should be. It's for the mankind. This piece should be read by every one. Terrific poem!

Excellent word choice and flow in this thought provoking piece. Nicely done!

Never though that I would be reading something this unique, a very good read, sad but with a heart.

Such a brave poem to write, and an epic one at that. I admire your courage to write about such a touchy subject, truly in great form.

"Inhaling the smoke of your charcoaled dreams,
Detesting fate for not bestowing you with bliss,
Forgetting you ignored your inner child's screams,
By consenting to inhabit this sin infested abyss"

This stanza seems to be the one that sort of sums up what you're trying to get at here, Natalie, I truly admire this poem and the form, and the splendid word choice. It's a poem, a plea, and a call out to the civilians all in one, such a uniquely phrased and formed poem. I could not have put it any better, or even half as much, this poem deserves such credibility for being a stand out poem.

I admire your courage, I admire this peice, I admire the form, the word choice, and I admire you for writing a poem like this. Someone had to, and that someone is you.

Excellent.