by Nikki May 11, 2008
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
I think back of when i used to cared,and think now why did i care so much.. i think back of how i loved,and wonder why i loved liked that, because now everything has changed, and what i used to feel is not even close to what i feel now.I can goes days without thinking about you, minutes without worrying about you.some many thing have changed like the way we would talk everyday,and how you would give me the right amount of advice,and things to bring me up again, now these things are just memories in my mind, deep in my mind,Theyre locked so deep inside so i wont reprrepressse old memories,and take me back to my old days,and i just hope one day i could give back to you, for what you've done for me |
I like how this is more like a journal entry its a different way to put it and it was so sweet but kinda sad either way you did a great job! |
by Adelle
Ok this piece isn’t your best it needs to be in stanzas and the are a lot of mistakes you keep forgetting to put capital I also when you use a , you do not need a capital only when you use a . and you need to leave a space after either there are some spelling mistakes that need changing and I also suggest these changes: |
by H E Losey
Reads to me like a journal or diary entry. Perhaps if you did put it in stanzas it would pick up a rhythm. Proof read and spell check. seems as though you wote in haste. |
Very cute...short and sweet......It would be more attractive it it were in stanzas though....just thought I'd give you some advice great job though! ^_^ |