Loved how you made it ryhme....you have a great choice of words in this one...keep writing....

First off, I love the title, it's captivating and very creative.

Simplicity of this piece excellently highlighted emotions that you described. I think that many people can relate to this write and I am certainly one of them. I really like your writing style, your pieces are always filled with refreshing ideas and creative descriptions. The topic that you wrote about here is a bit cliche yet you made it sound so original and captivating. You expressed heartfelt sorrow from the beginning to the end. I think that you should rearrange and add some punctuation signs through the piece to create more powerful rhythm but other than that I don't have any critic for this piece.
Greatly done.

My favorite stanza is:

- Tears don't douse the flames
the ones that burn in her private hell
the clock's frozen now, unmoving
she's trapped here, can't you tell?-

5/5 from me