Comments : These Feelings

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    That is very sweet and sounds very sincere, especially when you say that you cannot hide these feelings. but there was bot anything that really caught my eye. i mean the poem is sweet, but kinda common. as a girl i perfectly understand emotions through the poem that can be expressed with such simple words. but as a poet i think you could add something in your poem, like and exceptional metaphor or a vivid image or a bright and uncommon comparisson so the poem became eye-catching and unique.
    for this reason i rated it 4/5
    keep up good work:)

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Can relate to this one. I liked it ad the format was good. Nice word choice.

    I would join the first and 2nd stanza together though. To help with the flow a little. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lesslovedthanloathed

    "You've taught me how to learn to love and never live without a care."
    I think 'taught me how to love' is fine
    never live without care? as in never carefree?
    The words don't smooth over.
    That last line didn't do it for me D:
    3/5

  • 16 years ago

    by DarkCrystalbtrfy

    You showed your emotions very well in this poem although I think if you put a bit more detail in it could be better. But if you were going for simple i can see that and relate to it. sometimes our best work is when we keep it simple.
    i look forward to reading your other work
    Well Written