Comments : A promise

  • 16 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    "As i hold you in my arms i wish for that moment to never end.
    The rain falls on us i stare into your soul.
    As you say i love you i seal it with a kiss,"

    I like your imagery here, I can really imagine this happening.

    "I will always be here now waiting for your call.
    How we fell apart how this fell apart i will never understand.
    I cant promise you a easy path if you come back to me but what i can promise is my love."

    So sweet and passionate.

    " promise that i will be your mattres when you fall and your rock to get back up.
    I promise that i will i will cherish you with all my heart.
    I promise that i will never turn my back.
    When your feeling sad and feeling lonly i will be there.
    When you cry i will cry with you.
    When your light at the end of the tunnel goes out i shall guide you.
    I offer you all that i have even though its not enough.
    "

    I can relate to this so well, and I think many others can as well, this was such a good poem 5/5. I like you repetition of "I promise" I love this poem. great work!