Really good glad to have read it.. I like the flow and the rhyming scheme.. Great job keep writting.

Beck

You should tell her
the way she makes you feel
fear holds us back from so many things
push your self and great things can happen
but the worset of things can happen too
but rather regret the things you didnt do when you had the chance than regret the things you did do! atleast you will know and we are all so young the are plenty of people just like us wondering when that day will come when they love us to.
and you cant walk in a room inless that person looks at you or atleast notices you.
that person whos smile shines your hole life
and that persons whos eyes bring happness to your heart that person you always end up seeing in a grounded area you always se them in the cracks of people as they walk by and that person is looking at you as though you are the most important person in the world but they never walk up to you do they thus causing a mental break down pain strikes the heart unexpected and we fill as though we shall die no do not give up shine on follow your dreams colby keep writing and exceed at ever thing you do
WHAT WE ARE IS GODS GIFT TO US.
WHAAT WE BECOME IS OUR GIFT TO GOD...
im sorry this was so long
i hope you smiled at least twice while reading this
love Brandi
:)

I loved this and it was great if i were to rate you id give you a 6/5