by Choose xX Alex Xx Life May 13, 2008
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
A door does close, yet another opens invitingly wide. |
by Rachel RTVW
I think there are too many you's, I also don't like the use of hmmmmm in a poem. I do think the poem was creative although the flow could use some tweaking too. I think you did a decent job on it. It could be a lot better if you use some of the suggestions you've received. |
by Jaymes Haze
'A door does close, yet another opens invitingly wide. |
by eehcuhhhz
I don't understand the first stanza, second line. |
by H E Losey
I read the comments by "The Tasteless" and then your poem, I stay with my original words. I think "re-collating" does fit. Proper word usage is important! Inside and closed are not opposites(?), it reads well. |
by Sean
I don't struggle with the 'you'. i struggle with the 'doth' it just seems a bit, out of place considering the contemporary style of the poem - you might of meant some special meaning, i might be thick. |