Debbie,

I read it twice and I wonder what it is you have changed....
the first time I read it it was more...natural idk...hard to define. It is still very beautiful though. That one sentence about the carrying of the goodbye makes me feel so melancholic.
You are my absolute favorite poetess:)

Hugs,

Ingrid

Debbie
This is one of my favorites of all your poems. It is such a heartfelt write and the imagery is fantastic.

Soft feathers of wind tickling sleep, you are there
As you always were, hint of gold in your hair
On the bank embracing , kissing through the tears
As if forever held no place in our fears
Lazy slumber lingered with our warm embrace
On fragrant bed of Violets and Queen Anne's lace
You were laughing, we sent wishes to the sky
Never knew those seedlings carried our goodbye

Thes lines always make me cry..they take me back to happier times in my life. You never know when that last good-bye will come. So treasure and hold close to your heart the ones you love.

Skeletal branches plead for another start
Quiet river swells, her melancholy song
Remainders of a feeling, now love has gone
Wild flower remnants lie dry beneath bruised feet
"Please return"- repeats in every anguished beat
Clouds aloft bring home what I cannot deny
Change has come as snowflakes dance in Winter sky

The anguish of the heart that has lost it's true love. so sad.

Willing you back where I've been lonesome so long
Lying safe in my arms on new velvet grass
Feeling at home when you are with me at last
Love's quiet river flowing on as before
On to forever to be lonely no more
And we'll be laughing, watching storm clouds float by
Holding dreams and wishes we've cast to the sky

I love the ending. The promise of forever together. Gives one something to hang on to when all seems lost.

~Bravo~Bravo~
Love Cindy

^While ancient stones carried with snow melt go by
Still my form did quiet starling's lonely cry
Gnarled log my canopy dimpled brilliant sun
Dreams capturing day as quiet river runs
Soft feathers of wind tickling sleep, you are there
As you always were, hint of gold in your hair
On the bank embracing , kissing through the tears
As if forever held no place in our fears
Lazy slumber lingered with our warm embrace
On fragrant bed of Violets and Queen Anne's lace
You were laughing, we sent wishes to the sky
Never knew those seedlings carried our goodbye^

Excellent word choice and flow.

Oh the Springtime! New love's promise just begun
Recall memories as quiet river runs
Sleep has gone, love has flown, drifting lonely breeze
Wild geese cry in sympathy above bare trees
Vernal chill invades this trembling shattered heart
Skeletal branches plead for another start
Quiet river swells, her melancholy song
Remainders of a feeling, now love has gone
Wild flower remnants lie dry beneath bruised feet
"Please return"- repeats in every anguished beat
Clouds aloft bring home what I cannot deny
Change has come as snowflakes dance in Winter sky

Picture painting imagery. And the flow continues........clever and creative.

A walk into the void, what's left of you there
Can still close my eyes, sparkling gold in your hair
Quiet river silent, left waiting for the Spring
As I, for dandelion wishes to bring
Waiting for violets and lost starling's song
Willing you back where I've been lonesome so long
Lying safe in my arms on new velvet grass
Feeling at home when you are with me at last
Love's quiet river flowing on as before
On to forever to be lonely no more
And we'll be laughing, watching storm clouds float by
Holding dreams and wishes we've cast to the sky

No forced rhyming in this piece. A beautiful work of art. This is one deserving of the front page. Excellent job!

Debbie ... Debbie ... Debbie

I can not even begin to tell you the feeling I got while reading this piece. It is as though you dipped your pen in golden ink and colored the sky.

Vernal chill invades this trembling shattered heart
Skeletal branches plead for another start
Quiet river swells, her melancholy song
Remainders of a feeling, now love has gone
Wild flower remnants lie dry beneath bruised feet
"Please return"- repeats in every anguished beat
^^^
This part touched me so much ....

The ending so beautifully penned!

Skeletal branches plead for another start <---- brilliant wording!

The imagery is amazing .... the form ... well I can't even imagine trying to tackle this one ... lol

There is no form out there that I think you can not master with style and the flowing ink of brilliance.

Excellent read Debbie ....
And this is what P&Q visitors and future members should see when entering this site ....

Luanne

Congrats Debbie!
Very worthy of the front pages my friend. Exactly what visitors and new members of P&Q should see upon entering this site.
Penned with excellence!

Luanne

This poem is sooo beautiful... I love it, I like poems which have a optimistic idea to them, and this one's just wonderful

Congrats my beautiful sister :) I'm so proud to see this on the front page...LOL...and it is more then just your family members who think you are deserving :)
I love you
Cindy

From where I am......Ha...
Your beautiful words are as smooth as gossamer strands in the first rays of dawn
My comment of no importance in such talented company on P&Q.....

To read such worded beauty is all I can ever ask....

My appreciation to many who write so beautifully on this site, none so more than you..... Love

^ Thanks for that Meg!!!! I love it!!!

That was excellent n lovely one from d 100 plus existing n created poetic forms....

Keep it up..

Best wishz... Karan

Absolutely stunning. Bravo! *standing ovation*

Absolutely stunning. Bravo! *standing ovation* :)

Nice! keep it up i like it

Amazing work of artistic views. melancholy...