Sleep's Image

I believe people love sleep for that reason alone, a chance to escape the worlds reality if only for a little while. Get some blinds and the morning sunlight won't ruin your dreams haha nice job

I could relate with this scene of falling asleep and effortlessly entering your dreamworld blocking out the images of reality. I love the rhythm and flow you created here with your words because it made the piece more enjoyable to read.

"Our bodies nearing,
Heat radiating, senses tingling
My entire being losing control
Thoughts, feelings, stimulating"
^I do think the use of the word "control" kind of threw the flow off for me but not too much. Everything else was so flawless that this wasn't even that noticeable.

Well done *5/5*

This is a fantastic piece. The flow works very well with the poems structure, and I love the theme that you have picked for it. You do a very nice job amplifying your imagery with few words in a poem. I think that is great! Overall I'd say you've done very well here. Excellent!

Great job! :D The imagery and metaphors you used were clear as day. They were wonderful. The rhyming scheme was magnificent and as always the words themselves that put the whole poem together. Five out of five.

Good poem!