Comments : F.A.M.I.L.Y.

  • Very powerful poem. I love the way you started every line with the letters in family. Good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Good use of the acrostic style, nice terminology. I'm not sure I would have used "family" in the verbage, perhaps group or clan. And I would perhaps change the "and" for a comma in line 5. As always just an opinion.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael Verterel

    CAN'T BELIEVE I NEVER SEEN THIS ONE...
    DUDE, YOUR APART OF THEM, YOU HAVE TO GET USED TO THAT FACT, NO MATTER HOW MUCH PAIN IT CAUSES YOU...

    GOOD PIECE THOUGH...