Choking on dust

by Kaila   May 14, 2008


Criticisms take over me like a swarm of bees.
Attacking and preying upon me when I'm down.
Words of hatred spill out of your mouth like water.
Drowning until I can no longer see light.

Tears cascade like snow out of my emerald eyes.
So delicate that you could kiss them and they'd disappear.
Swollen eyes, red and puffy become more vacant.
They are like black wholes with no emotion.

Trying to fight back with my own hatred.
Words are stuck and dust is the only thing to be heard.
Trembling of what might fly out like a hair ball.
It never comes just black, empty, dust.

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  • 16 years ago

    by LitxUpxWithxLife

    Flawless symbolism and imagery. The feeling of everything just hitting you at once is a pain i think everyone feels. As i've said you are a great writer. Absolutely amazing. I love how you symbolized choking on your words. (5/5)

  • 16 years ago

    by she

    Wow, i love the words you chose, so desriptive and unique, i really liked this poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lindsay

    Little mistake. "They are like black wholes"
    Should be "holes".
    I was surprised to see no rhyme scheme, and it was a little choppy for a free verse. However! you get total props for that being something everyone can relate to.
    I really enjoyed your use of the word dust, and your imagery was very solid.
    4/5

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