Little mistake. "They are like black wholes"
Should be "holes".
I was surprised to see no rhyme scheme, and it was a little choppy for a free verse. However! you get total props for that being something everyone can relate to.
I really enjoyed your use of the word dust, and your imagery was very solid.
4/5

Wow, i love the words you chose, so desriptive and unique, i really liked this poem!

Flawless symbolism and imagery. The feeling of everything just hitting you at once is a pain i think everyone feels. As i've said you are a great writer. Absolutely amazing. I love how you symbolized choking on your words. (5/5)